when its time to say goodbye I would hug my mom and dad to love them forever and ever and love my son. then leave crying probably and I would probably sleep in a tent just kidding or actually I would if thats the only place to sleep and wait. To get in that war then when I arrive i would feel uncomfortable probably. then it would be time for me to get in that big war,so I get in the war and fight the britian and would win that war and defeat the britian. Before that when Iam on my way there i felt a little nervous and excitied to be in that war against britian ,so when I went off and my emotions were a little yah trippy yah thats what I thought of. In the beggining of the war I ran off and yelled warrrrrrrrrr warrrrr and my guys on my side were winning the war and only eighty six more guys to go. And before i felt upset about hearing stuff burned down,later when my son was called to the war i was upset and gave him an I love you and was huged for ever and to be loved. Then the last three days i spent in a tent and in sleeping bags all day and night,and the worst part was I had no tv and I love tv and so i just got it out of my head and just forgot about it, went it was now time to go in that long war and me in the middle of it yelling even though I was scared I thought I would not survive and still alot worried about my son alot for him to be in that war although Iam sad for him and and so I wondered what he be in right now or doing every second. yah but it would of went well to be spending three days and then later sent to the awlful war and that was what happened in the old days and it would be cool me in a hot air balloon,yes I could amagine being in that. It would be so fun.And so that was the end of my last three days and in war and my son being called to the war and spend the three days there and by the way i was in a middle of a forest where I sleep in that tent for three days and my son too. for three days I cant believe I waited for that.and end of that day. And yes I was with the boston tea party liking the boston tea party that was what i studied for when on their way on the big ship on their way.and that was about all I did on my three days. In boston all they had was alot of food there and alot of other different food in philadelphia.in june 7,1776,delegates from virginia introduced resolution. other wise I did not tell you about what happened in the war in it we were shooting cannons and had a sling shot with balls of fire to destroy their fort and armor and them. But it still was a scary and nervous day.
You need to start proofreading your work and I would suggest you read your work to yourself aloud because I would not be very comfortable in a conversion with you if you spoke the way you have written this entry. The sentences are not complete and making the paragraph discombobulated. Also, you need to write as if you are informing your audience of various events. Therefore the details need to be written clearly in a tone that all types readers can understand. 70%
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